Published March 30, 2007
Kinda cynical, but I'm seriously mad at the state this world is in. Enjoy.
Keep drinking your Starbucks,
keep drowning it all in beer.
Just enjoy the chorus
of "Oh F***'s" in your ear.
Keep speeding in your cars,
sorry, SUV's.
Keep clearing your windsheild
of pollution killed bees.
And hey, while you're at it,
DON'T LISTEN TO ME.
Keep destroying our planet,
yeah! Cut down that tree!
You're right!
Everything in life should be free!
Go on, do it! Why shouldn't you?
Aren't you the master of all you see?
If it feels good, do it,
never mind reality!
Naturally, it's never YOUR problem,
don't look at me.
So go on, do it. Nothing's your fault,
so just let the world rot.
Is any of it your problem?
Of course not.
It's all his fault, stupid politician.
Stupid punks in mullets.
Oh, does that offend you? Well you can't kill me,
you've used all
your
bullets.
So this is our world. The world you idiots made.
Enjoy.
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I love the place you're coming from. Try to make this sound a little less of a rant though, let the reader in a bit. You don't need exclamation marks - your words should be able to convey enough emotion. I think you lose the flow a bit at the end, it starts sounding a bit unnatural.
You are saying everything that I've been ranting on about! I love your poem. If only there were more of us who could out-number the sheep and the blood-suckers in charge!